Screenplay Based Upon The Menzingers ‘On the Impossible Past’

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  1. Melody Bot

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    Adam Reiss has written a screenplay based upon The MenzingersOn the Impossible Past. The entire thing has been put online for fans to read and give feedback.


    Hi. I’m Adam. I wrote a screenplay called “On the Impossible Future.” I’ve created this website to share it with whoever might read it because I’ve been working on this for years and I’ve reached a point in the creative process where I desperately need fresh eyes to look it over and give me feedback. All of my friends are probably sick of reading drafts (even if they’re too nice to tell me).

     
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  2. Chris Prindle

    That berg attacked us, war on the arctic! Supporter

    What a super perfect idea!
     
  3. beckerm6

    Newbie

    great idea. no way i'm reading 70 pages tho. i'll throw money at it.
     
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  5. sean_rugy

    Trusted Supporter

    so cool, I'll definitely be checking this out.
     
  6. Michael Schmidt

    Don't recreate the scene, or reinvent the meanings Supporter

    Can't wait to read this.
     
  7. MexicanGuitars

    Chorus’ Expert on OTIP Track #8 Supporter

    Read this entire thing earlier, reinforced how much I love this album lol.
     
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  8. Michael Schmidt Nov 28, 2016
    (Last edited: Nov 28, 2016)
    Michael Schmidt

    Don't recreate the scene, or reinvent the meanings Supporter

    Yeah, I really liked the story. I definitely left him a long note that he probably won't read.
     
  9. Aaron Mook

    GLOW // @avmook Moderator

    What a cool idea. Will remind myself to read sometime this week.
     
  10. morri3ma

    Newbie

    this kicks ass. i just read the entire thing in one sitting. now i'm sad and just want to listen to this fucking album.
     
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  11. Michael Schmidt

    Don't recreate the scene, or reinvent the meanings Supporter

    Haha yeah, I really enjoyed his story. Hopefully more Menzinger fans will read it and we can discuss it in one of the band's threads while we wait for the new record.
     
  12. Shrek

    look how old that fuckin cat is Prestigious

    This was considerably better than I expected.
     
  13. adamlikesdogs

    Regular

    I'm the guy who wrote this. Hi everyone! Thank you @Jason Tate for posting this and for anyone who has taken the time to read it. I am pleasantly surprised (to say the least) how many people are into it and sending me cool emails about it. If nothing else comes of this, it's awesome to know that my writing is having an impact on people in the same way that OTIP did for me. Shout out @Michael Schmidt for the long note by the way. I now have my fingers crossed that chorus.fm has some readers in Hollywood who happen to be interested in making a movie about The Menzingers lyrics...

    But yeah, I'm looking for feedback. I've worked on this for so long (and sometimes went through month long phases of not even being able to look at it because I was so sick of it) that it's hard for me to discern what works and what needs tweaking. If anyone's got any feedback for me, hit me.

    And...

    Haha, sorry to break it to you, but it's 126 pages. Dang!
     
  14. falconate

    Open your closed mind. Prestigious

    I always see this album like a movie in my head whenever I listen to it. It'll be interesting to see how much of what I see matches with the screenplay!
     
  15. beckerm6

    Newbie

    absolutely LOVE this idea
     
  16. Derek Wright

    Better still, be my winding wheel. Prestigious

    This is so so AMAZING. I'd love to see this brought to life!
     
  17. SellMyOldClothes

    Newbie

    This was such a great read! I was hooked from the beginning and it gave me a new appreciation for an album that is already one of my all time favorites. The attention to detail is fantastic and I was able to picture the story as if I was watching it in the movies. Hollywood needs to pick this up haha. If anything to critique I think the setting feels more like a small blue collar town (like Scranton, pa - where the menzingers are from and myself) rather than Philly. OTIP is filled with Scranton references and such things you included like the paupack cliffs.. It's a pretty common theme for people in Scranton to get stuck in the routine, wanting to escape but never leaving. Buttttt that's probably just my personal bias coming through and I understand that Philadelphia is going to be more relatable to a wider audience which probably makes sense for what you're looking to achieve. Anyway, great job sir and thank you for that enjoyable read.
     
  18. adamlikesdogs

    Regular

    Thanks man! All I need now is a ton of people who feel this way to start bugging agents to give it attention.

    Yeah, I just read an interview with Tom on how OTIP was about Scranton and how it used to be a town with good blue-collar jobs and that's no longer the case, so it's run down and kind of dead end and I guess a lot of people are doing heroin lately. Might make sense to stick it in Scranton to up the "gotta get out of here" vibe. I'll give that some thought. By the way, it totally didn't cross my mind that Paupack Cliffs are like more than a hundred miles away from Scranton when I was writing the script. Whoops.

    I've gotten some really amazing emails with feedback on the screenplay and I'll be making some changes soon-ish based on those emails. From small stuff to changing Casey's attire when they hike (thank you @Michael Schmidt), to removing some of the rape jokes in the dialogue, to tweaking Greg's back story a bit, among other things. I'm really excited for the next draft. If anyone has suggestions, I'm open.